Country Roads: #FridayFictioneers
My Thoughts on Seeing This Prompt:
Yikes! I’m not going to write this one. It looks dark, gloomy and will not elude a great story. But then I haven’t written for my favourite Friday Fictioneers for the past two weeks. I was away traveling, and when I returned I got swamped by life’s little follies. I’m back this week armed with lots of cheer and sunshine on my shoulder. So let me give this a shot. Let’s see how it turns out- dark and dreary or bubbling with some positivity. Here I go.
COUNTRY ROADS
Kiera and Ken have walked almost eight miles.
Automobiles still don’t go past these dusty, countryside roads.
They are following the map that Uncle Willy had shared with them.
Ken is determined to return to the home he had grown up in. Keira does not share his sentiments, but tags along. After all that’s what makes Ken happy.
Suddenly, dark clouds hover above them, and it starts pouring. Ken points to a dilapidated house and they run for cover.
A musty smell emanates from the barn. On the bathtub, are Ken’s rubber Duckies.
Ken breaks down.
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Writing for our lovely host, Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Friday Fictioneers. This is a 100 word photo prompt. Credits for the Photo prompt: What’s His Name. Read some fantastic entries to this week’s Friday Fictioneers here.
24 thoughts on “Country Roads: #FridayFictioneers”
Your story’s last line earned a little chuckle of pleasure from me. How lovely that Ken is so moved by the home in which he grew up! In response to some of the other comments, I don’t think Keira is necessarily meek; she just realised how important the search was to Ken – and his reaction proves that she was right.
Aw, what a good story 🙂
I find this quite sweet… it seems like they found the best of their roots.
Yes Bjorn, they actually did. Thank you for swinging by and reading. Cheerio!
Not spooky at all….. Infact you made it a return to nostalgia…
Was not meant to be spooky Sunita The idea was to create nostalgia.
That was great, Natasha…But, I am intrigued. What happens next? The dilapidated house clearly doesn’t seem to belong to Ken. How did his duckies land there? What’s the suspense here? Are you planning on a sequel?
It actually belonged to Ken. He was very small when they left. Haven’t though of a sequel but you never know. :)) Thanks for reading dear Shilpa. xo
I like your story Natasha! Ken finding his boyhood home with rubber duckies is sadly poignant. Kiera is really nice to trek along. It shows that she really must love him! Good story! Thanks for the entertainment!
Yes, Nan, looks like you are one of the few readers who truly understood what I was trying to communicate through my story. Bang on infant. :))) Thank you for reading and commenting. So appreciate it.
Dear Natasha,
Ken is very sentimental isn’t he?
One comment if you don’t mind. The expression “toe the line” seems quite harsh for this story. To toe the line is an expression that means to be subservient as a slave or servant. Perhaps “go along with him” might be more appropriate since it doesn’t sound like Ken is a hard man. I hope that makes sense.
Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle for your feedback and for always reading and taking time to leave your imprints.
Yes, Ken is sentimental, a bit like me I guess.
You are right, I guess “toe the line”, might be too harsh a phrase. Will tweak it.
Thank you Rochelle. Happy weekend!
Cheerio!
Oh, that was rather sad and rather lovely!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
Thank you so much Susan. 🙂
There may be hope and he might be sentimental… but I have to agree, she seems a tad meek.
She’s actually not meek Dale, just considerate and loves him a lot. I just tweaked a line. see if it sounds different now. Thank you so much for reading. 🙂
Nicely told, Natasha. Yous story is especially relevant to me as I can see similar emotions in my daughter when we discover her old toys stranded under other stuffs . She also loves her bath toys.
Interesting how sudden flashbacks in memory can affect a man
A shame to find his old home in ruins, but then that is life in many ways. Nicely done.
Thats very interesting take on the prompt .WOnderw hat happens next
There is hope here, peeking out from behind the clouds. Hope in Ken’s wife’s actions, hope in Ken’s reaction. Hope, hope, hope. Just what we need at the moment! Nice one, Natasha. Glad to see you back.
Interesting imagery there, Nats. I liked the underlying implication that Ken is the decision maker and the other one just tags along. Speaks of the power dynamic in the relationship.
A couple of things I felt could have been better:
1: The reference to ‘a house’ and it just happens to be the one that has a barn with Ken’s ducks seems rather abrupt.
2. Automobiles going past dusty roads? Should be on, no?
This was beautiful Natasha 🙂
Thank you so much Meha. :)))